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I fall from the sky in shimmering waves, landing on golden leaves
Rolling along their velvety planes, I drip into the ground.
I seep into the dark, moist, soil, rising with damp fingers  sprinkling the air with mist...
Rejoicing in my rebirth, I enter the fortress of clouds in the sweet gray sky.     


(quick note, this format isn't how I exactly want it to be, but i was getting pissed at my keyboard, so I shall fix it later ^_^)
Hello lovely reviewers and readers. ^_^ Thinking about this poem, I consider it to be quite inevitable, since I lived in the third rainiest town in the United States for 12 years. But I wrote it while walking through a cemetary (spelling?) while it was raining one day, and saw this tree just blazing with colors. It looked positively soft and textured and wonderful, what with the light and the sky making a fantastic contrast, and the ground very soft and moist...ahh it was nice. Anyhow, I'm not very good at describing my own writing, so just have a quick peek at it, and tell me what you think. I ADORE REVIEWER'S COMMENTS! haha its what keeps me going at times you know?
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:iconhopium:
Nyah. Wonderful. The wording subtly suggests a medieval image; it's neat. You totally used this English last year, and I adored it even when I didn't know it was yours.
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:iconartismylover:
haha yes indeedy i did. i really craved mr chalmers compliments since he gave such nice ones so when i wrote this he fell in love with it and i got major kudos from him. i miss his class :(
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:iconhopium:
Ugh, so do I. I like Ms. Garot, but the lack of creative writing and the lack of any feedback on any writing ever is really discouraging. I hate feeling that I'm incapable of writing anything worth reading now, just because I'm not particularly inspired. I wrote this thing last year, and it was just an outpour of words and thoughts after my dad happened, and he said that it was amazing, and he like, discussed the event with me? And it was so good of him. I don't know. He's such a good guy. Every time I see him though, I never say hi loudly enough. Hah. Soooo, I lost that piece. I was looking for it a monthish ago, and I still can't find it anywhere, and it's really freaking me out. NNanranrnar.
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:iconartismylover:
man! i agree with you. garot needs to get on top of the feed back thing, cause it really made me doubt myself and i was like EEEERRG. so eventually i dropped the class. but i know how trying to say hi to chalmers, sometimes, i almost violently say HI CHALMERS cause most of the time i just give a weird nod thing. but the other day i was like, mr chalmers, i miss your class. how are you? then we talked and then he let me borrow a book. sometimes i wish i could like...visit him on the weekends and talk about books while sharing liquorice or something like that.
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:iconhopium:
Haha. How is taking English correspondence? Do you have to write lots of stuff that is dumb?

That is some seriously good Chalmers story. You should do that again, but I should come. Or we should both just become football players so that he could love us. Haha.
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:iconartismylover:
haha, man if only we could do sports. but perhaps we could do the randomly going to his house on the weekend with some books. i would have more courage if i weren't going in alone, hehe.

i haven't actually started the correspondence cause im addicted to ebay.
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:iconhopium:
Haha. I don't have much courage, either. Maybe in the summer, I will have more. Times that are not June, July, or August really are not good for me. Neee.

Ebay is a good place! I should go over there. I've been feeling sartorially uninspired lately. It's tragic.
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:iconartismylover:
Ahhh. that does sound tragic. i believe ebay to be a blessed place. also, june july and august are my best months as well. i have seasonal disorder. boo.
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General-Devious Jul 8, 2005  Student General Artist
love the picture.
And the words fit in very nice.
It feels good. :)
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:iconartismylover:
mmmm. that was what i was going for! *hug and smooch* you are my favorite person right now:D
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